Adam Gottlieb said
1 year, 2 months ago: To build on what Dianne said, your proposal is too generic, and there is nothing on the page that supports the claims you’re making. You need to show potential sponsors that you really know your stuff and that your program can truly make a difference in people’s lives.
You may want to add a little info on your background and explain a bit more what your wellness program entails and throw in a graphic or video as Dianne suggested on that campaign homepage.
Good luck.