said 1 year, 2 months ago:
@kristi-hines I’m hearing you. And interestingly, they didn’t include a link. I guess they assumed this compelling Intro would intrigue me enough to invest two more clicks to find it.
Well the thing that really inspired me to open this topic was not the poor grammar, or the lonely parenthesis, but the plea. Business professionals use LinkedIn for qualified leads and business partners. They rely on peer endorsement to avoid throwing darts at Google when looking for employees, products, and services. And I’m telling you, I will not endorse someone for public speaking whose Intro copy informs me that they are in poverty and have only made a few dollars at their craft. I imagine a guy on the street corner with a sign that says “Will speak for food”.
When writing your copy, convey authority and knowledge without being haughty or arrogant, never advertise your weaknesses, and never, NEVER beg for work.